Well... I'm kind of new at this so I'll just start this off by saying a bit about myself!
I created this to put my writings down on, maybe get some feedback as well, and just try to get myself out there a bit. Hopefully you all like my writings as much as I like writing them. I write anything varying from poems, to short stories, to possible future novels. So here's the first part to something I'm writing and I most certainly do love criticism of all sorts.
Creed
Chapter 1A
Sweat glistened on his forehead, the run had exhausted him to the point of fainting, and the mental stress drove him almost to insanity, almost. Cierra ran up belong side him. She seemed fine, except for the distraught look on her face.
“Did they make it?” asked Jeremy.
“No. They were overtaken before they got half way across the field an-…”
Her body began to shake violently, her knees buckled below her, as she hit the ground sobbing.
“Oh the screams!” she wailed. “I couldn’t help them, they were too far away and some were coming for me.”
Jeremy sitting on the ground beside her, he put his arms around her shoulders, and gently pulled her towards him. She clasped her hands around his neck, the sobs continuing to wrack her body.
It seemed as if an eternity had passed before anything was said, she looked up instinctively at him, her sobbing had subsided to random, stifled cries, through wet, puffy eyes, and asked, “What now?” Before burying her head once more in his arms to try and stifle another cry.
Looking up towards the sky, he saw ravens and buzzards gathering, and flying overhead knowing they were waiting for them to clear away so they could gorge on their buffet of human flesh not but about a couple hundred yards away.
“We move on. When we reach the next town, if they haven’t gotten there yet we gather supplies, and head to the safe zone.”
He had said all of this without looking at her, purposely avoiding her eyes, but watching the forest around him so as to make sure there were none coming for them.
Cierra stood slowly, her body still shaking from the outburst, and took in the surroundings around her.
The creek on her right babbling silently to itself, not a care in the world, while the ravens and buzzards cawed, waiting to touch down to begin their feast on the deceased and dying. The clouds overhang cast a gloomy shadow on the entire forest, giving off a demonic vibe, which seemed to be distorting the proportions of the space in which they had ran from. The winds warm, yet unnerving, wafted a breeze, smelling of the carnage they had witnessed, towards them, making them both gag considerably.
“If we’re going to get moving, there’s no time like the present.” she said, voice faltering on the last word.
“Are you sure you’re up to it yet?” Jeremy asked, hoping the answer was yes. He hated being so close to such a gruesome scene of murder and the stench was beginning to cloud his vision.
“No, but I will have to manage, come on.” She began to head East at a brisk walk, towards Signet City.
Jeremy scrambling to his feet, hastily caught up with her, catching his foot on a root and almost falling over while rushing,
“We will get through this.”
Sparing one glance behind them towards the scavengers in the sky he was met with unsettling surprise, which turned to horror mounted over his face to see the last of the birds flying towards the spot where they had just ran from. “They’re coming already...” He muttered under his breath before turning back to Cierra.
“We should speed up a little…. just in case you know?” Cierra nodded her head in agreement, both speeding up to a slight jog, but neither saying anything.
